Panic Zone

[maymay]

BRAVO BRAVO brother you are on the way of becomin the next great raper,
PS:i see some small mistakes in your poem if you corrige'em you'll have a great piece of work
peace out

[Karim_Rap_4_life]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة maymay

BRAVO BRAVO brother you are on the way of becomin the next great raper,
PS:i see some small mistakes in your poem if you corrige'em you'll have a great piece of work
peace out

yeah I can see taht.....The fact that I wrote it in a hurry if I tell you you don't believe that
..........Just for a half hour no more......I'm going to correct somes okey and thatks a lot for your attention

[maymay]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Karim_Rap_4_life

yeah I can see taht.....The fact that I wrote it in a hurry if I tell you you don't believe that
..........Just for a half hour no more......I'm going to correct somes okey and thatks a lot for your attention

WOOW,are u kiddin me?that great poem was written in 30 mn?that really makes me believe more and more in your potentiels
I ll be followin up your updates
good luck

[Karim_Rap_4_life]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة maymay

BRAVO BRAVO brother you are on the way of becomin the next great raper,
PS:i see some small mistakes in your poem if you corrige'em you'll have a great piece of work
peace out

Thank you so much Miss

this is the first time some one

tell me that there are some mistakes

in my poems I really need that I need

some ones to inform about my mistakes

because this is what i'm looking for

Really thank you.

I just found this mistakes

scarry (adj)______Scary (feared_Horrific)

good (adj)_______goods (Noun mean Foods)

canons (law)______cannons (heavy gun)

stay________stays

please tell me about the other

mistakes please show me

them I'm waiting you please

I need that for real

By the way I don't wish to be a rapper

yes I die For Hip Hop and Rap and some

other kinds of Rap Music depending on the

lyrics I mean the old rap the pure one

not of these days you know what I am saying

....my poems prove that I'm loyal to Rap music

when you see the way I write them....to the fans

of Hip hop and Rap please becarefull to the lyrics

please try to be intelectuels know the lyrics before

you listen to it because there is some blasphemy

words and that's a different society and a different

religion.....not only rap music but others genres too

I'm going to write an article about it so please enjoy me

when I publish it and tell me your views inorder to discuss some more okey

Peace Up