Ain’t playin

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة نَازِكْ

i see bro you 've just shew them what's you're made of ^^
n i got exactly the things hidden in the 4 verse i've even imagined them in ma imagination
n i also read your conversation with yakumo n it make me wonder what kind of things i do write ?i really have no idea i just write i mean it's just nonsense ,so pls can you tell me what's right and what's wrong in my writings?just to improve n i wanna ask you too about "free lines "i do follow some writers in tumblr and they are " native speakers" they just write without any rules ,what kind of poems do they write ?

Well depending on my own experience, I learnt how to write step by step. In my very first days I used to write free lines; a year after I started to compare my writings with Rap this latter has much common similarities with poetry, so I found that my writings lack rhymes in the end of each line hence I learnt to do it. I wrote so many poems but they seemed they lack balance and you can see that in my old topics of the banned membership. What I did is trying to make lines equal but I could not coz I was trying to do that looking to the size of lines but this was a mistake; I wrote some poems/ raps like that but it didn’t work. Lately I learnt that lines need to be equal in a different way it should be by counting syllables (syllabification) in poetry it’s called Meter; and you can see that in solitary mind, ain’t playin and the next ones Inchallah and i'm going to re-make for about 10 writings of mine i mean the previous ones to correct and add what's lack and move what's a plus; so;
Meter: is the number of syllables in each line; if the 1st line is composed by 14 syllables it would be nice if the 2nd line is composed by 14 / 13 syllables; lines will be balanced and equal.
Rhymes: we all know about it, it’s the main basic of poems. When two words that have the same endings. Example: brain, pain, strain, rain… etc. it’d be beautiful if you include internal rhymes I mean rhymes inside the lines not only in the end of each line.

I gotta rhymes like troops; like a team or a troupe
It’s a voice of the truth, from a hopeless youth
I’ve been raised in a hood; where the life is not good
Been chased by gloom, which creeps to my room
From: True 2 da Game

If you don’t respect Rhymes and Meter this means your poem is considered a (Free Verse) just like in Arabic
(الشعر الحر)
coz it’s free from the main rules it doesn’t contain them. I noticed you do respect the Rhymes sometimes 4 lines have the same rhyme, sometimes 2 lines have the same rhyme and sometimes 6 lines have the same rhyme and this makes your writing a poem so respect rhymes.
Rhymes and Meter are not the only elements that a poem concludes we’ve also:
Assonance: it’s when two words have the same vowel sounds example: brain, claim/ vibe, hide … etc.
Consonance: two words having the same consonant sounds at the beginning and the end but have a different vowel sound example: slip, slap / scape, scope … etc.
Alliteration: words that start with the same consonant, it produces a cool sound; example: silly stupid singers seek for sum of money
with these elements ur writings will be attractive and good looking so this is for the technics and for the things you write it's your choice u r free …. whatever u respect rules it will be poem ... what else?