Ain’t playin

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Karim-Rap-4-Life

Oh, it’s a grief based themes then, though I hate reading sad writings I’ll try to do so that’s for sure since it’s poems and thoughts it won’t take a long time to read them you know Hhhh I’m lucky it’s not novels J
The rap game depends on plying with words and rhymes it’s the main basic. Between the lines … there you find the goal of the writing I guess every writer hide something for the reader and if this latter is a smart one he’ll see it. Each verse has special message the 1st verse talks about How/why/ I write? Which inspiration drive me to write and telling that I’m doing it like a habit for me I don’t earn nothing from it I just want to share it not like the ones who want to be famous and be seen on TV. I had so many opportunities to drop my records the recent days I was invited to do a show in my town to show that it has a cultural background I refused coz most of colleagues don’t respect and see themselves high and I won’t mix mine with theirs! So the response was in the 2nd verse telling them that they are affected of what they see on Hollywood things and imitating telling them I do rap coz I luv it not coz I want to step on it and reach fame. Moving to the 3rd verse which prove that I’m matured and don’t clown and presented a general situation in Algerian society and how I find myself in another world which is not how I imagined in my childhood and then in the 4th verse it’s something that I wanted to tell them that I can be professional and make you feel tired to reach the real meaning of what I wanna say … Like if you have a cultural background about the political situation in Algeria you will understand my 4th verse and if you don’t you’ll lose the line. BTW the 4th verse is talking that it seems that our people still enslaved economically, psychologically tortured and wounded so first (Once I wanted to fly I lost my wings) when I dreamt which is the first step of any person, (I couldn’t find something where I cling) I found nothing that promises me to continue no help. (Then I fell in a dirty dry field … Killed) it’s the sick society with no respect no values where people suffer a lot those who were dead it’s the victims of homicides and those who were chilling are the surviving ones that are facing problems. (I tried to figure out what’s going on, no body spoke but they pointed out) this tells about the freedom of expression in my country where people can’t speak frankly but they sign to avoid troubles. (To a white castle with greens around, Dead king crowned by his surround, Celebrating, laughing, dancing, I wanted to step in I kept advancing) it’s the unconscious old president and his surrounds in El-Mouradiya castle, I included greens around the castle after I said before Dirty dry field and it was near to the castle itself here to say that only those who are in the government are living good but the others are suffering even if they are working coz they’re like slaves it’s the reality when we have no time for ourselves to entertain and waiting for our salaries each end of months to pay for our needs you know and so on. (I wanted to step in I kept advancing, The so called ogress started cursing, Back to your field serve some nursing) when I wanted to see what’s happening inside the castle an ogress offended me and ordered me to back to my field this latter has another meaning (domain). Like we see on media when a doctor, journalist or a teacher want to do some politics and try to understand what’s on behind the scenes he’s attacked by the government servers from society or lower class to tell that doctor to back to his domain (field) do his job coz it’s not his business to intervene in politics.
Thanks for passing by and thanks for your time the next one has not been completed yet it needs the 4th verse I’ll post it as soon it’s done and you’ll like it it’s a bomb.

i see bro you 've just shew them what's you're made of ^^
n i got exactly the things hidden in the 4 verse i've even imagined them in ma imagination
n i also read your conversation with yakumo n it make me wonder what kind of things i do write ?i really have no idea i just write i mean it's just nonsense ,so pls can you tell me what's right and what's wrong in my writings?just to improve n i wanna ask you too about "free lines "i do follow some writers in tumblr and they are " native speakers" they just write without any rules ,what kind of poems do they write ?

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة نَازِكْ

i see bro you 've just shew them what's you're made of ^^
n i got exactly the things hidden in the 4 verse i've even imagined them in ma imagination
n i also read your conversation with yakumo n it make me wonder what kind of things i do write ?i really have no idea i just write i mean it's just nonsense ,so pls can you tell me what's right and what's wrong in my writings?just to improve n i wanna ask you too about "free lines "i do follow some writers in tumblr and they are " native speakers" they just write without any rules ,what kind of poems do they write ?

Well depending on my own experience, I learnt how to write step by step. In my very first days I used to write free lines; a year after I started to compare my writings with Rap this latter has much common similarities with poetry, so I found that my writings lack rhymes in the end of each line hence I learnt to do it. I wrote so many poems but they seemed they lack balance and you can see that in my old topics of the banned membership. What I did is trying to make lines equal but I could not coz I was trying to do that looking to the size of lines but this was a mistake; I wrote some poems/ raps like that but it didn’t work. Lately I learnt that lines need to be equal in a different way it should be by counting syllables (syllabification) in poetry it’s called Meter; and you can see that in solitary mind, ain’t playin and the next ones Inchallah and i'm going to re-make for about 10 writings of mine i mean the previous ones to correct and add what's lack and move what's a plus; so;
Meter: is the number of syllables in each line; if the 1st line is composed by 14 syllables it would be nice if the 2nd line is composed by 14 / 13 syllables; lines will be balanced and equal.
Rhymes: we all know about it, it’s the main basic of poems. When two words that have the same endings. Example: brain, pain, strain, rain… etc. it’d be beautiful if you include internal rhymes I mean rhymes inside the lines not only in the end of each line.

I gotta rhymes like troops; like a team or a troupe
It’s a voice of the truth, from a hopeless youth
I’ve been raised in a hood; where the life is not good
Been chased by gloom, which creeps to my room
From: True 2 da Game

If you don’t respect Rhymes and Meter this means your poem is considered a (Free Verse) just like in Arabic
(الشعر الحر)
coz it’s free from the main rules it doesn’t contain them. I noticed you do respect the Rhymes sometimes 4 lines have the same rhyme, sometimes 2 lines have the same rhyme and sometimes 6 lines have the same rhyme and this makes your writing a poem so respect rhymes.
Rhymes and Meter are not the only elements that a poem concludes we’ve also:
Assonance: it’s when two words have the same vowel sounds example: brain, claim/ vibe, hide … etc.
Consonance: two words having the same consonant sounds at the beginning and the end but have a different vowel sound example: slip, slap / scape, scope … etc.
Alliteration: words that start with the same consonant, it produces a cool sound; example: silly stupid singers seek for sum of money
with these elements ur writings will be attractive and good looking so this is for the technics and for the things you write it's your choice u r free …. whatever u respect rules it will be poem ... what else?

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Karim-Rap-4-Life

Well depending on my own experience, I learnt how to write step by step. In my very first days I used to write free lines; a year after I started to compare my writings with Rap this latter has much common similarities with poetry, so I found that my writings lack rhymes in the end of each line hence I learnt to do it. I wrote so many poems but they seemed they lack balance and you can see that in my old topics of the banned membership. What I did is trying to make lines equal but I could not coz I was trying to do that looking to the size of lines but this was a mistake; I wrote some poems/ raps like that but it didn’t work. Lately I learnt that lines need to be equal in a different way it should be by counting syllables (syllabification) in poetry it’s called Meter; and you can see that in solitary mind, ain’t playin and the next ones Inchallah and i'm going to re-make for about 10 writings of mine i mean the previous ones to correct and add what's lack and move what's a plus; so;
Meter: is the number of syllables in each line; if the 1st line is composed by 14 syllables it would be nice if the 2nd line is composed by 14 / 13 syllables; lines will be balanced and equal.
Rhymes: we all know about it, it’s the main basic of poems. When two words that have the same endings. Example: brain, pain, strain, rain… etc. it’d be beautiful if you include internal rhymes I mean rhymes inside the lines not only in the end of each line.

I gotta rhymes like troops; like a team or a troupe
It’s a voice of the truth, from a hopeless youth
I’ve been raised in a hood; where the life is not good
Been chased by gloom, which creeps to my room
From: True 2 da Game

If you don’t respect Rhymes and Meter this means your poem is considered a (Free Verse) just like in Arabic
(الشعر الحر)
coz it’s free from the main rules it doesn’t contain them. I noticed you do respect the Rhymes sometimes 4 lines have the same rhyme, sometimes 2 lines have the same rhyme and sometimes 6 lines have the same rhyme and this makes your writing a poem so respect rhymes.
Rhymes and Meter are not the only elements that a poem concludes we’ve also:
Assonance: it’s when two words have the same vowel sounds example: brain, claim/ vibe, hide … etc.
Consonance: two words having the same consonant sounds at the beginning and the end but have a different vowel sound example: slip, slap / scape, scope … etc.
Alliteration: words that start with the same consonant, it produces a cool sound; example: silly stupid singers seek for sum of money
with these elements ur writings will be attractive and good looking so this is for the technics and for the things you write it's your choice u r free …. whatever u respect rules it will be poem ... what else?

nothing else except of too many thanx for ya bro ^^
ok i've found out too many things now it's clear that it needs more time ,more time n for real you helped me
arigato

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة نَازِكْ

nothing else except of too many thanx for ya bro ^^
ok i've found out too many things now it's clear that it needs more time ,more time n for real you helped me
arigato

hhhh nah do not thank me coz when i was in need of someone to teach me things about writing in a good way no body they hid!
and i'm still learning if i learnt something new i'd tell u definitely

one thousand times
work hard and learn