the begining of my short story

[Black_Poison]

Congratulations for the story
there abseloutly is no doubt about you tallent
this was fantastic fabulous and somtimes sad
i enjoyed reading it to the last word
Lamar and Jimmy real frienship that last forever
it's hard to find it these days
i was really sad about what happened to Jimmy
he was a great guy
and about A****ey too
but sometimes pain can be stronger than life itself

i like Lamar's attitude taking revenge from the bad guys
and this line :“they were ready to die and I was ready to kill”

reflects an angry hopeless strong vengful person who has nothing to lose

it reminds me of someone

and ilke that behind the scene you are showing that living in USA
is so hard not like what people think
and especially in poor cities where all sort of evil is widespread
i

this will make a great movie
still waiting for the next parts
i reseved a seat to be a follower
i would really like to hear what happend next
till then
my best wishes