your opinions for my paragraphe about amazon forest

[DarknesFreak]

The amazon is one of greatest forests in our blue planet
ladies and gentlemen this amazing forest is very important to our life because it protects and Preserves our environment by giving us fresh clean air My dream is that we ensure that this resource will remain natural and not contaminated by the dark side of human evolution like tobacco smoking and carbon dioxide emissions ,
it's our duty to take action against this side effects
i hope that you enjoyed listening to me and understood my message, and thank you very much for coming..


i hope you don't mind i took the liberty of changing some things in your paragraph

[b2m5n]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة DarknesFreak

The amazon is one of greatest forests in our blue planet
ladies and gentlemen this amazing forest is very important to our life because it protects and Preserves our environment by giving us fresh clean air My dream is that we ensure that this resource will remain natural and not contaminated by the dark side of human evolution like tobacco smoking and carbon dioxide emissions ,
it's our duty to take action against this side effects
i hope that you enjoyed listening to me and understood my message, and thank you very much for coming..


i hope you don't mind i took the liberty of changing some things in your paragraph

Very nice one But I spotted some mistakes in yours as well

The amazon is one of greatest forests= The amazon is one of the greatest forests

very important to our life=Very important to our lives


this side effects=These side effects


I hope my criticisms are welcome.

Take care.