My Teenage Heartbreak

[.kiki]

hello sissy! I'm truly glad to read your thread here honey ^^ and discover your outstanding talent

you're good.. I mean it, your lines are well connected, you don't have to read it over again to absorb the meaning
and then your words... you sure know how to pick the right ones

next time, try to make it more cheering, ok? of course I don't know what you usually write about, 'cause you're not sharing any, but I can guess it's mostly about the inside of you
so, for your sake too, try to write about the external world around you...
briefly: take care of your talent ^^

by the way, i did pray for you, and i'll remember you in my supplications nchallah


PS: edit your text and and change 'god' to God ok, there's a diffrence



be safe
peace

[Sadinne]

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hello sissy! I'm truly glad to read your thread here honey ^^ and discover your outstanding talent

you're good.. I mean it, your lines are well connected, you don't have to read it over again to absorb the meaning
and then your words... you sure know how to pick the right ones

next time, try to make it more cheering, ok? of course I don't know what you usually write about, 'cause you're not sharing any, but I can guess it's mostly about the inside of you
so, for your sake too, try to write about the external world around you...
briefly: take care of your talent ^^

by the way, i did pray for you, and i'll remember you in my supplications nchallah


PS: edit your text and and change 'god' to God ok, there's a diffrence



be safe
peace

Oh well I'm glad you liked it, & thank you so much for your encouraging words, it really means a lot to me
♥

And I do write about what's going on around me too, and all my poems aren't so depressing xD

maybe I'll post it here sometime
^^

Thanks for the advice sister & for your prayers too, God bless you
♥