On my way

براهيم جموعي · 2012-10-30, 16:22

hi every body how r u doing

i'm new in this section but old in this forum
i living in design section and now i in vacation

and this is 1st subject mine

on my way

i'm walking on my way to forget what happened to my mind
i looking around me nothing... except the dark and the rain
the wind begins, no place to go nobody take my hand and show me right way
i feel cold in my skin in my blood . could be this last my day
i see my life front my eyes by surprise i hear voice calls me by my name
i open my eyes and realized i'm in just dream

wake up, wake up , the school is waiting

hhhhhhh

amazing story . what do you think ?

i hope accept me like friend

Karim-Rap-4-Life · 2012-10-31, 11:46

firstly I congratulate you for joining this forum
and then I would like to say welcome brother here is your family
I'll read it and comment later okaaay
keep it up

hind 306 · 2012-10-31, 11:53

hi my brother nice poem

u r welcom between us

براهيم جموعي · 2012-10-31, 22:24

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firstly I congratulate you for joining this forum
and then I would like to say welcome brother here is your family
I'll read it and comment later okaaay
keep it up

thenx brouther
waiting u r comment

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hi my brother nice poem

u r welcom between us

thankx sister

this is first time write on forum usually i write in my dairy

but now i'll writttttttttttttttttttttte heeeeeeeeeeeeeeeere

Black_Poison · 2012-10-31, 22:26

Welcome brother to your second home
hhhh amazing dream.....or nightmare i guess hhh
keep it up brother
peace

براهيم جموعي · 2012-10-31, 22:36

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Welcome brother to your second home
hhhh amazing dream.....or nightmare i guess hhh
keep it up brother
peace

hhhh i have 1000000 dream like it

thankx a lot sister

Karim-Rap-4-Life · 2012-11-01, 11:54

Ibrahimkira

On my way

Welcome again

Reading the first lines I started to imagine the place and the events of a lonely man walking in the dark rainy night and no body on his side just trying to fix the right way …..

But when you indulged the event when some one was calling your name I thought some one was calling you to secure and provide a help but guess what!

It’s a call for school

And school in winter is not cool

Hahahahahahahah

Hey if you don’t mind there are some mistakes you have to correct them so as your poem will be great.

Ps: why you did not finish the story and delayed the conclusion a lil bit.

If you want to see an example I’ll lead you to one of my stories which was put in a humble poem but full of rhymes and imaginations it’s called (Thirsty for love)

Here’s the link

براهيم جموعي · 2012-11-01, 15:06

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Ibrahimkira

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On my way

Welcome again

Reading the first lines I started to imagine the place and the events of a lonely man walking in the dark rainy night and no body on his side just trying to fix the right way …..

But when you indulged the event when some one was calling your name I thought some one was calling you to secure and provide a help but guess what!

It’s a call for school

And school in winter is not cool

Hahahahahahahah

Hey if you don’t mind there are some mistakes you have to correct them so as your poem will be great.

Ps: why you did not finish the story and delayed the conclusion a lil bit.

If you want to see an example I’ll lead you to one of my stories which was put in a humble poem but full of rhymes and imaginations it’s called (Thirsty for love)

Here’s the link

thanx for comment brother
i'll take this advice and Inchallah work by it

Black_Poison · 2012-11-01, 15:52

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hhhh i have 1000000 dream like it

thankx a lot sister

No need to thank me Yakagami Light
?good brothers always deserve good encouragements right
just go ahead and keep writing

براهيم جموعي · 2012-11-01, 23:29

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No need to thank me Yakagami Light
?good brothers always deserve good encouragements right
just go ahead and keep writing

again thnkx a lot sister for support me
and i guess

you watched death note

the best anime ever

Black_Poison · 2012-11-02, 12:48

Yeah i've seen deat note....amazing anime
i'm a fan of Naruto...and Naruto shippuden
i mean ..........it's obvious
hhhhh.....i like everything about ninjas

براهيم جموعي · 2012-11-02, 16:15

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Yeah i've seen deat note....amazing anime
i'm a fan of Naruto...and Naruto shippuden
i mean ..........it's obvious
hhhhh.....i like everything about ninjas

looks like , i'm not the only fan of anime Japanese
good we are two now
hhhhhhhhh

soussodj · 2012-11-02, 16:31

hello brother,u're welcome between us
for the poem,really i congratulate u and i support u to keep writing
we are waiting your new amazing poem
GOOD LUCK brother

براهيم جموعي · 2012-11-02, 16:54

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hello brother,u're welcome between us
for the poem,really i congratulate u and i support u to keep writing
we are waiting your new amazing poem
GOOD LUCK brother

thnkx a lot sister for support me

Black_Poison · 2012-11-02, 17:13

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looks like , i'm not the only fan of anime Japanese
good we are two now
hhhhhhhhh

yeah....you know i thought that too
we are not two actually we are 4 fans
there's Yakumo and Hellsmoke
they are anime fans too