My sky /my new poem

cute_angel · 2008-03-25, 16:01

Peace be upon you

How are you guys

these days I was a bit upset

so I tried to write those words

I hope you will like it

And I'm waiting for your criticism ok

My sky

Once a fortune_teller in the sky

Told me about the secret of a butterfly

In a cradle of life where I found a goblin

Of a fairy tale that showed me the way to spring

Where the flowers twinkeled like stars

And theire dew like a crown of pearls

I walked like an elf between the heigh trees

And the serene and pure seabreeze

Then I saw a castle of white snow

On a mountain surrounded by a rainbow

I climbed it to reach the palace

To see the magic and charm of the place

But a wind blow full of sorrow

And made me like a thin leaves of a willow

So my tears rush from my eyes

And my ears didn't hear an voice

I found my self in a whriles full of woes

In the darkness of sadness and solitude

I dindn't find anyone just my God

Who gave me a candle of faith to be my guide

cute_angel · 2008-03-30, 14:50

No one liked it???????

gold_dream · 2008-03-30, 22:14

thank you so much angel!it is nice poem I discovered many new words here

setifienne · 2008-04-01, 13:17

peace be upon u dear cute angel
,of course we did like it !!! it's beautiful ,and each syllable is pregnant with nuances of profoundly important meaning i really enjoyed reading it ,and i loved the two final lines the most ,thank u so much ,God bless you
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