هيا معا

[faris05b]

سنحاول قدر الامكان التميز في الانجليزية

[faris05b]

درت فقرة وارجوا ان تصحح لي

[exellance]

نعم سنحاول ان شاء الله

[faris05b]

at one day. i decided to visit planet Mars so i went with a group of tourists who have same want.
this planet is one of the planets of solar system . outside the earth we find ewept the space and more space we didn't find anyone because there is no inhabitants.also on Mars we didn't find traffic jams . the nature is pure .limpide and clear . we didn't findthe pollution against the earth our planet in a real danger .this is the good part. but in mars .we didn't exist any form of life because no water our planrtits called the "blue planet" but mars is dry .no leisure .boring life and no nice places to visit
this visit is useful for me because it see to mee the cost of my planet.

[samara lara]

[QUOTE=faris05b;1056750248]at one day. i decided to visit planet Mars so i went with a group of tourists who have same want
here we say "" who have the same thinking " ........².
this planet is one of the planets of solar system . outside the earth we find ewept the space and more spacehere we didn't find anyone because there is no inhabitants.also on Mars we didn't find traffic jams . the nature is pure .limpid and clear . we didn't find the pollution against the earth our planet in a real danger .this is the good part. but in mars .we didn't exist any form of life because no water our plant its called the "blue planet" but mars is dry .no leisure .boring life and no nice places to visit
this visit is useful for me because it see to me the cost of my planet.[/QUOTE
]


it's a good paragraph but you choose the simple words
and it's good start

i couldn't correct it all but if i want correct it

i will change every thing in this paragraph"" the form and the words ""




good job

[**خليصة **]

راني معاكم
غير باشرو برك

[Rukia Kuchiki]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة faris05b

at one day. i decided to visit planet Mars so i went with a group of tourists who have same want.
this planet is one of the planets of solar system . outside the earth we find ewept the space and more space we didn't find anyone because there is no inhabitants.also on Mars we didn't find traffic jams . the nature is pure .limpide and clear . we didn't findthe pollution against the earth our planet in a real danger .this is the good part. but in mars .we didn't exist any form of life because no water our planrtits called the "blue planet" but mars is dry .no leisure .boring life and no nice places to visit
this visit is useful for me because it see to mee the cost of my planet.

your paragraph is very good
I don't find a lot mistakes
....
So
.....
the only mistake tha I find it is in this statement
at one day
we don't say at
we say in
.....
so the correct statement is
...
in one day
...
that's all
...

[imen03]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة faris05b

at one day. i decided to visit planet Mars so i went with a group of tourists who have same want.
this planet is one of the planets of solar system . outside the earth we find ewept the space and more space we didn't find anyone because there is no inhabitants.also on Mars we didn't find traffic jams . the nature is pure .limpide and clear . we didn't findthe pollution against the earth our planet in a real danger .this is the good part. but in mars .we didn't exist any form of life because no water our planrtits called the "blue planet" but mars is dry .no leisure .boring life and no nice places to visit
this visit is useful for me because it see to mee the cost of my planet.

have same goal

i like you're paragraph you don't have many mistakes
goooooooo on

[faris05b]

my paragraph is between your hands

[faris05b]

[QUOTE=samara lara;1056750721]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة faris05b

at one day. i decided to visit planet Mars so i went with a group of tourists who have same want
here we say "" who have the same thinking " ........².
this planet is one of the planets of solar system . outside the earth we find ewept the space and more spacehere we didn't find anyone because there is no inhabitants.also on Mars we didn't find traffic jams . the nature is pure .limpid and clear . we didn't find the pollution against the earth our planet in a real danger .this is the good part. but in mars .we didn't exist any form of life because no water our plant its called the "blue planet" but mars is dry .no leisure .boring life and no nice places to visit
this visit is useful for me because it see to me the cost of my planet.[/QUOTE
]


it's a good paragraph but you choose the simple words
and it's good start

i couldn't correct it all but if i want correct it

i will change every thing in this paragraph"" the form and the words ""




good job

[faris05b]

Hi . who are with me for continue

[chouchou23.22]

It is good
I am with you

[kiara]

ممم . فكرة رائعة

لي عودة فيم بعد

[kiara]

hello


is any one here !

[fifi tery]

hello it's a good idea