Inner soul

little marizzel · 2012-09-22, 14:00

Heyy guys this is my 2nd peom here and i wanted to share it with you so you'll give me your opinions
Dont take it rough with me guys

inner soul

Days going by
I'm struggling to survive
fighting to stay alive
haters all around and enemies are beside
pain in forward and memories are behind
So I’ll just stay in the middle and circle myself with a line
Hold up let me add a signe, one more step and you’ll die
They say sky is the limit but my dreams are over size
I’m trying to skip over darkness but I feel like I’m paralyze
Life is full of lies that’s why I listen with my eyes
Live for the smile and pray that I’d never cry
Depression makes you see black lights
My life has been full of white nights
Trying to make it work right
But it’s only getting tight
I’ve been walking none stop and nobody was my guide
My heart was locked and my mind was blind
Made a bunch of mistakes cause I never thought twice
And now I’m paying the price
God is my pride
Believing comes from wise
And that’s what I’ve realized
Loneliness is nice
Comparing to a world full of vice
Hearts cold as ice
Life is a gambling, you should know who to roll the dice
Trust no one must be the latest trice
I’ve been hurt so many times
And words cut like knifes
Sometimes deeper than a dog bit
happiness is a sea full of sharks so hold your breath and dive
and pray to god not to take away your life

Hind_dz · 2012-09-22, 19:03

Loneliness is nice
Comparing to a world full of vice

"So true"

I really love ur poem

ur talented

keep it up

n we'll B waiting 4 ur nxt

little marizzel · 2012-09-22, 19:21

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Loneliness is nice
Comparing to a world full of vice

"So true"

I really love ur poem

ur talented

keep it up

n we'll B waiting 4 ur nxt

Thxx sis it just means a lot ^^
and i'll write a lot more for sure

amel nina · 2012-10-05, 00:00

This poem has an elusive quality, I mean only few people can understand the deep meaning, because the "soul" has always been something mysterious that we wanted to figure out. Generally, I congratulate you for this wonderful piece of writing and don't forget to post other ones whenever you finish wriring them

Keep it up and never give up

little marizzel · 2012-10-05, 21:46

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This poem has an elusive quality, I mean only few people can understand the deep meaning, because the "soul" has always been something mysterious that we wanted to figure out. Generally, I congratulate you for this wonderful piece of writing and don't forget to post other ones whenever you finish wriring them

Keep it up and never give up

oh God, I really can't describe that feeling
when you know that there's at least who cares bout what i write
Thx Sis for the push up
i really appreciate that ^_^

Black_Poison · 2012-10-05, 21:56

Seems like we've got another tallented member to join the family
well i'd like to say welcome
congratulation for your writing
and i gotta read this well............i'll be back to reply
peace brother

little marizzel · 2012-10-06, 12:15

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Seems like we've got another tallented member to join the family
well i'd like to say welcome
congratulation for your writing
and i gotta read this well............i'll be back to reply
peace brother

Thxx Sis for welcoming me here
it is nice to meet you guys
^^