Hiiiiiiiiii it was nice to read your topic
First I would like to start with The Title
I know why you write (d) between Brakets
Inorder to focus that the love was in the past
keep making tricks like that Girl
By the wayI found it amazing for real
Your words means that You got deceived ofcourse
a love matter doesn't it I can feel that the same I got....
There is something I would like you to tell me
about...Is this one a poem or a thought?
With all my respect I can see that it is a thought
because it contain less rhymes as I notice
I think Girls have a strong imagination than Boys
as you are doing right here....I liked the way you
made similes really.
For me it looks so good but my advice is if you want it
to seem like a strong poem you need to find more
rhymes..
Don't be disapointed My Friend I can't let you without
an alert I'm just want to advice you because we are
right here to learn so I study eatch poem carefully
inorder to share it and learn from it and if I got something
to say I should say it Okey.
As got a few experience in writing i would like to
inform you that I'm going to publish a brand new topic
about how to write a poem I don't how it will seem to
members right here I know I'm not the one who suppose to
write such a topic but when some ones say that my
topics are a lilttle bit amaing that means that I should
give a justification or a plan of how I write my own poems
Because I noticed that no one would give as an advices
on how to make a real poem......just wait for my topic
for a few next days Inchallah...God bless you