منتديات الجلفة لكل الجزائريين و العرب - عرض مشاركة واحدة - a friend
الموضوع: a friend
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قديم 2011-12-03, 13:17   رقم المشاركة : 4
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Mh47

These Poem is the most amazing of your writing
I'm really admired by that kind of words and
balanced lines in these poem your lines are balanced
equally better than mine that keeps your poem look beautiful
the meaning of your poem is so real I liked it...
the part I like too much is

When I try to talk to you it seems that I have no voice
I want to leave you behind but I don’t have the courage to run
But I’ll still ready to catch you when you’re are ready to fall

These sentences I think you should re-write these
it's not too big but a mistake I guess
I try(ied) to support you in whatever choices you made
If I supported you==would make a mistake

keep writing I'm personally here to comment and show you my opinion okey I mean I support like you supported me I still remember that Good luck










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