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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : read it and tell me what you think


amani b
2012-04-27, 16:52
hello guys what s up
hope evrybody is good
i decided to put one of my poems here
hope you like it
wating for your comments


hunted : (regrets) :d

it s been so long
sens i hold my pen
so mny feelings to write about
but ink is drying in

guess its my world :what i write
with evry letter
there were a fight
between my mind and what s going through my heart
other times i am so much of a knight
battling through the dark of night
breaking evry single memory
into nice little pieces
guess it never worths it
doing evryhing to keep standing

it s too many ideas
i cant go on..am i crazy
may be i m wrong ..i am talking truth
have no more sens to move on
feels like i am nothing but a rubbish
yet animals keep hunting me
tearing me apart
and evry tie they say :
so yummy so sweet "
i need you baby i need you "

though they are just like drugs
let me say a bad dream
making me frown and smile in the same time
they are such a punishment
they are the cure though
they are what i ve been looking for

in a way or in an other
they keep me strong
and evry time i have that feeling
that they cant take a peace of me
but they do
yes i battle through the sadness
but they do
each take his share
and i am left with the leftovers
but yet for me that s just enough

hope you liked it

love

amani b

amani b
2012-04-29, 18:05
no comment

so ?

miss.cool
2012-04-29, 21:16
u wrote this ??


if so its amazing
keep it up sis

xchow
2012-04-29, 23:33
nice try keep going

polina03
2012-04-30, 18:18
woow i'm impressed..i think that it is great
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keep going
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i can't wait for the next one!!

Karim_Rap_4_life
2012-04-30, 19:00
yes so good keep going on but why you didn't publish it in the members writing section .....that's true i man your poem good luck or you just keep writing don't be hopeless okeeeyyyyyyy

amani b
2012-05-01, 09:27
of caurse i worte it
and i have plany more
i am gonna try to put some other ones here
i ll put it in the writings sections i promess brother
thanks for passing
and glade you liked it

Karim_Rap_4_life
2012-05-06, 17:49
never mind it's my pleasure good luck

sourour 1
2012-05-06, 17:56
U wrote this ?
it's great
keep going

rola.29
2012-05-06, 23:00
hello it's wonderful.. that's amazing
i advice you really keep writing such poems .. send us everyday a one.. Ipromise i'll read them ..
if you keeps wrinting, u'll improve your talent sweety ... it's wonderful
and you're in Constantine, what a honour(bent bladi) ok, taht's fine.
i wanna stay on contact with u via the net

douki23
2012-05-07, 22:05
very nice good luck

amani b
2012-05-09, 12:31
hhh
it s nice finding someone from my city

soo happy you liked my writing

i love you guys thanks for passing by

la manita
2012-05-10, 16:08
its amazing

AymenAkremi
2012-05-14, 20:16
مزيد من التقدم ان شاء اللله مشكووووووووور

ملكة الامتياز
2012-05-16, 14:27
good but ya have some mistakes there !!

attif
2012-05-30, 21:05
veryy nice sis

amani b
2012-06-01, 13:52
thanks brother

thanks a lot

Sadinne
2012-06-09, 15:06
Hey =D

I really enjoyed reading it, it was very interesting and pretty deep, but there's a couple of mistakes that you should try to fix, other than that it was really nice =p

assala BaC2012
2012-06-10, 15:48
love it!!!!
wish all the best 4u____

amel nina
2012-06-13, 20:28
nice one
keep going

مَجْنُوْنَةٌ أَنَاْ
2012-06-13, 22:17
with evry letter
there were a fight

hadi 4 5las
go ahead

i'm a writer 2

belkacem0147
2012-06-13, 23:02
It's Really Great Writer from you sis
But I Like it Your Comment and talking about your self and confidence I really want to know What kind of you especially those people who will lose if they left you

mus13
2012-06-21, 16:31
outstanding poem the one you 've written my sister.well done.