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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : Panic Zone


Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-12-28, 18:55
Title:

Panic Zone

By:

Karim Cherifi

To:

Every One

Eh Yeah running outside hands on the gun

It is an horror scarry life it's not a words for fun

Those who are a fan of satan his dun is done

no where to run Mercy is gone

Somes are looking for the good or a food

Some others looking for bloods on the road

youngsters with a bad mood

drugs in a hood a law of the wood

If they could they would

people just like animals still fighting

but who is the animal invent law living

evrey body should run toward the islam

that's the aim if you want to win the game

don't exclaim it's the panic zone

Wild Dogs on the hood Vampires sucking the blood

Algeria's sons looking for the drugs

Algerian yougsters like a gangsters hustlers

Lakamora algeriano with grand canons

bands from mlilano doing like demons

Jagoire cars like pablo in chikago

Sigar and costume like Fidel castro

If they continue what they do

Death King stay looking for you

circle of fire َ

Just like Chi Gui Vara and Tony Montana

Here is a drama not the Hanaa Montanaa

No rock band no Demons followers

No sign of skull and two bones

It's a Gangsta Rap

Underground Rap

Pranksta Rap

feeling the Gap

what's up what's up

It's me a man of Rap

like me or not

that's your choice

see me comming through

watcha gonna do

it's my words

comming replying to

doing what it pose to do

on december twenty four

knock on my door

if you want somemore

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newflower
2011-12-28, 20:09
i liiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiike these expressions thank uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu for this precious participation.
i really feel great when i see ur writings even if i do not write a single comment but it is truelly nice words. be always in touch. thanks again.

حكاية قلب
2011-12-28, 23:03
StrooooNg Strong Strong Words

I like it i read Crefully and i liked ur Courage and
Here u show us How Much u love ur self Like That as it is
I can feel ur honesty
ConGratulation Friend this what i want u to Be
Be so Confident ^^

/
Strong
But dnt forget to Smile
Harmful But Nice
^^


By the Way
Hannah montana_______ like this
i know u dnt like her
p:
But .....anyway
*
*
on december twenty four

knock on my door

if you want somemore



Is There More
O.o' !!!

.....
hhhh i'm Just Kidding
^^

Nice Job
continue like that

/

/
Ur Frnd

maymay
2011-12-29, 17:43
BRAVO BRAVO brother you are on the way of becomin the next great raper,
PS:i see some small mistakes in your poem if you corrige'em you'll have a great piece of work
peace out

Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-12-29, 19:15
BRAVO BRAVO brother you are on the way of becomin the next great raper,
PS:i see some small mistakes in your poem if you corrige'em you'll have a great piece of work
peace out

yeah I can see taht.....The fact that I wrote it in a hurry if I tell you you don't believe that
..........Just for a half hour no more......I'm going to correct somes okey and thatks a lot for your attention

maymay
2011-12-30, 11:21
yeah I can see taht.....The fact that I wrote it in a hurry if I tell you you don't believe that
..........Just for a half hour no more......I'm going to correct somes okey and thatks a lot for your attention

WOOW,are u kiddin me?that great poem was written in 30 mn?that really makes me believe more and more in your potentiels
I ll be followin up your updates
good luck

حكاية قلب
2011-12-30, 16:03
Yép this what i call It
Inspiration

^_^

Guud Luk frnd

Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-12-30, 16:19
i liiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiike these expressions thank uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu for this precious participation.
i really feel great when i see ur writings even if i do not write a single comment but it is truelly nice words. be always in touch. thanks again
.
Yeah Flower Thank you for your passing ...I had had many precious participations before this one but you were absent I'm always be here but you are not....I'm trying to keep in touch

Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-12-30, 16:20
StrooooNg Strong Strong Words

I like it i read Crefully and i liked ur Courage and
Here u show us How Much u love ur self Like That as it is
I can feel ur honesty
ConGratulation Friend this what i want u to Be
Be so Confident ^^

/
Strong
But dnt forget to Smile
Harmful But Nice
^^


By the Way
Hannah montana_______ like this
i know u dnt like her
p:
But .....anyway
*
*


Is There More
O.o' !!!

.....
hhhh i'm Just Kidding
^^

Nice Job
continue like that

/

/
Ur Frnd

hold on hold on I'm just describing Algerias hoods nothing more it's not a matter of mine I'm disciplined the society we grew in make us so strong why? because of the Troubles in the hood.
but even though I'm trying to win my self and get away from that troubles just like too many algerians simple men around the hood but so cool and calm with principles nothing more....I mean we can't follow brothers in the hood robing and wasting time but trying to be self controled even if we know there will be no good futur for us but there is a GOD so what will happento us will be welcomed with no retreat.
I'm not as you consider no I'm just so simpl but I've my principals and my goals and I think every body right here has a characteristics for me I don't care what are the kinds of your principals at least you've a principals you get what I'm saying
I think the strong who can do what he hate to do I mean Smile even if you can't even if you're sad and this one I can't do.

Yeah Honey I see that loool thank you for correction
for the fact that I hate that disneys or I don't know how they call it I didn't focus on the spelling because I'm not interested in it no more If I was interested I would not mispell it.

there is so many more but I can't write them down because I guess that no one would give an attention just like I told you before you remember I can write every day I am not saying I want to write every day I am saying I can I can do that but I don't want simply only a few members righthere deserve my participation because when you write a great damn poem full of rymes and you see 500 visiters and 5 comments I just loose my temper

Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-12-30, 16:21
BRAVO BRAVO brother you are on the way of becomin the next great raper,
PS:i see some small mistakes in your poem if you corrige'em you'll have a great piece of work
peace out


Thank you so much Miss
this is the first time some one
tell me that there are some mistakes
in my poems I really need that I need
some ones to inform about my mistakes
because this is what i'm looking for
Really thank you.

I just found this mistakes

scarry (adj)______Scary (feared_Horrific)
good (adj)_______goods (Noun mean Foods)
canons (law)______cannons (heavy gun)
stay________stays

please tell me about the other
mistakes please show me
them I'm waiting you please
I need that for real

By the way I don't wish to be a rapper
yes I die For Hip Hop and Rap and some
other kinds of Rap Music depending on the
lyrics I mean the old rap the pure one
not of these days you know what I am saying
....my poems prove that I'm loyal to Rap music
when you see the way I write them....to the fans
of Hip hop and Rap please becarefull to the lyrics
please try to be intelectuels know the lyrics before
you listen to it because there is some blasphemy
words and that's a different society and a different
religion.....not only rap music but others genres too

I'm going to write an article about it so please enjoy me
when I publish it and tell me your views inorder to discuss some more okey

Peace Up

maymay
2011-12-31, 14:59
Title:
Panic Zone
By:
Karim Cherifi
To:
Every One


Eh Yeah running outside hands on the gun
It is a horror scarry life it's not a words for fun

ether say "it's not a word" or say"it's no words" you cant use "a" with a plural word


Those who are a fan of satan his dun is done

those who are FANS"those" is plural and "a fan"is singular,you should say "those who are FANS"


no where to run Mercy is gone
Somes are looking for the good or a food

"food is an uncountable word you cant use "a" before it



Some others looking for bloods on the road
youngsters with a bad mood
drugs in a hood a law of the wood
If they could they would
people just like animals still fighting
but who is the animal invent law

I dont get this line?

living
evrey body should run toward the islam
that's the aim if you want to win the game
don't exclaim it's the panic zone
Wild Dogs on the hood Vampires sucking the blood
Algeria's sons looking for the drugs
Algerian yougsters like a gangsters hustlers
Lakamora algeriano with grand canons
bands from mlilano doing like demons
Jagoire

jaguar

cars like pablo in chikago

chicago

Sigar and costume like Fidel castro
If they continue what they do
Death King stays looking for you
circle of fire َ
Just like Chi Gui Vara and Tony Montana
Here is a drama not the Hanaa Montanaa
No rock band no Demons followers
No sign of skull and two bones
It's a Gangsta Rap
Underground Rap
Pranksta Rap
feeling the Gap
what's up what's up
It's me a man of Rap
like me or not
that's your choice
see me comming through
watcha gonna do
it's my words
comming replying to
doing what it pose to do
on December twenty four
knock on my door
if you want somemore



I hope I was able to help a little

Karim_Rap_4_life
2012-01-01, 11:30
oh thank you so much
yes you're so right yes
thanks a lot
but " an horror" is right
and "a horror " is right too
I think it is heavy to say a horror
but easy to say an horror
Maybe I'm wrong I don't know

"Those who are"___yeah it is a plural word
because of that I put "are" but I just let the
word Fan without "s" of plural to sound good
with the rhymes.

"Somes" is true and "Some" is true too

"a food" yes a mistake yes I did not know that
thanks a lot

"Blood" the meaning will be better than saying "bloods"
I mean "blood" sound stronger than "bloods" maybe
I'm wrong yes.

sorry
I mean "but who is the animal incent Low Living"
the person or the authority who make the people
suffering from the plans he does simply
the diference between the Riches and the poor "
why poor are too many.

Milano
Jaguar__Yes I was looking for the right spelling
Chikago___In Hip Hop culture "C" is mentioned "K"
I just wanted to write it like that.

Of course your corrections helped a lot the most faults was
not focusing on them the mistake that I didn't know
about is that "a" can't be used before "Uncountable nouns"
and "Plural" yeah thank you a lot for your precious participation
it is a pleasure to me it's a honor to me when you
follow my writings thank you for that for real.





I want to inform you that I will not correct the mistakes that I made I mean I will not regulate my topic again just because of members right here can see that I make mistakes too and can see that there is persons who are better than me just like you here okey and thankl you very much Miss for correcting my mistakes and just keep guiding me

maymay
2012-01-06, 10:31
oh thank you so much
yes you're so right yes
thanks a lot
but " an horror" is right
and "a horror " is right too
I think it is heavy to say a horror
but easy to say an horror
Maybe I'm wrong I don't know

"Those who are"___yeah it is a plural word
because of that I put "are" but I just let the
word Fan without "s" of plural to sound good
with the rhymes.

"Somes" is true and "Some" is true too

"a food" yes a mistake yes I did not know that
thanks a lot

"Blood" the meaning will be better than saying "bloods"
I mean "blood" sound stronger than "bloods" maybe
I'm wrong yes.

sorry
I mean "but who is the animal incent Low Living"
the person or the authority who make the people
suffering from the plans he does simply
the diference between the Riches and the poor "
why poor are too many.

Milano
Jaguar__Yes I was looking for the right spelling
Chikago___In Hip Hop culture "C" is mentioned "K"
I just wanted to write it like that.

Of course your corrections helped a lot the most faults was
not focusing on them the mistake that I didn't know
about is that "a" can't be used before "Uncountable nouns"
and "Plural" yeah thank you a lot for your precious participation
it is a pleasure to me it's a honor to me when you
follow my writings thank you for that for real.





I want to inform you that I will not correct the mistakes that I made I mean I will not regulate my topic again just because of members right here can see that I make mistakes too and can see that there is persons who are better than me just like you here okey and thankl you very much Miss for correcting my mistakes and just keep guiding me


I'm sorry for taking so long to answer but you know,back to college and no free time at all..
I wanna say that it would be my pleasure to follow your writings and do what i can to correct you, i just hope you dont get pissed when people tell you that you're wrong cause I ll be doing that ..:1:

maymay
2012-01-07, 11:09
what?aren't you going to answer me?I'm waiting

Karim_Rap_4_life
2012-01-07, 16:58
I'm sorry for taking so long to answer but you know,back to college and no free time at all..
I wanna say that it would be my pleasure to follow your writings and do what i can to correct you, i just hope you dont get pissed when people tell you that you're wrong cause I ll be doing that ..:1:






yeah yeah thank you it will be my pleasure and I say nothing I just love to see others criticize me that's so good and sweat to me even if i was demand them people right here to criticize me with a ahrd comments but no one would do that untill you came and you're appreciated that show me that people give a care to what you do or what you talk and if the opposite is true i mean no one say what he think i think there is no intelkectuals right here except few ones and thnk you

maymay
2012-01-07, 17:13
Then you better get ready cause I'm about to strike really hard :1:

Karim_Rap_4_life
2012-01-08, 12:10
Then you better get ready cause I'm about to strike really hard :1:

welcome and I'm ready for whatever..........I want to inform you that there many mistakes in my poems I know them but I just so lazy to correct them but when get time i will do....i'm just like you do i've no time to especially this days but anyway thanks a lot and I need a hard critics

maymay
2012-01-08, 18:07
yeah,me to I have no time these days especially with exams starting,I m having my first tomorrow so I hope you pray for me....good luck bro

Karim_Rap_4_life
2012-01-09, 11:09
yeah,me to I have no time these days especially with exams starting,I m having my first tomorrow so I hope you pray for me....good luck bro


Good Luck and I wish you the best

ilina 07
2012-01-10, 15:07
amazing poem.. very strong and deep words...really impressing....thank you for the hard working karim ..god bless you

rock-girl46
2012-01-10, 17:05
wow my friend this is awsome i loved it......and it's so wow...

dahmane78
2012-01-13, 17:14
toujours je lis vos poèmes c merveilleux