I'm a B girl

[Algerian's light]

I walk alone in a narrow path
totally lonely oh it's too hard
the fate treat me so bad
and my soul is enjailed
by the darkness of the world
oh . my heart cry out loud
and my eyes wipe blood
.......................................
there is no differtent
to live or to die
staying or going it's the same
I'm waiting just to over the game
without feelings oh what's a shame
this is my way to reach the aim
hey you there the handsome
if you want to know how I am
miss bad girl it's my name

this is my first try. so please Karim_Rap_4_life correct my errors...........

[حكاية قلب]

Wow

*
*
Nice writing Girl i Love it so much
really there are some mistakes like u said

and u wish if Karim Correct it
hhhhh

Ok
i'll let him do
C'mmon Karim Correct them


By the way plz can u tell me what u mean By
enjailed

you have a good pen i wish u Good Luck

Carry On


^.^

Peace

[Karim_Rap_4_life]

Yes I will do ...Just hold on okey I think I would like it

[مهاجرة إلى ربي]

I walk alone in a narrow path
totally lonely oh it's too hard
the fate treat me so bad
and my soul is enjailed
by the darkness of the world
oh . my heart cry out loud
and my eyes wipe blood
.......................................
there is no differtent
to live or to die
staying or going it's the same
I'm waiting just to over the game
without feelings oh what's a shame
this is my way to reach the aim
hey you there the handsome
if you want to know how I am
miss bad girl it's my name

this is my first try. so please Karim_Rap_4_life correct my errors...........


allah almosta3an,

what is this my sister?
i have badly tried to match what is in your signature with these words ?

or it's just a style ?

i khnow that you khnow what doses it mean : a bad girl

so ma dear sister ... be aware and don't forget that

(( مَا يَلْفِظُ مِنْ قَوْلٍ إِلَّا لَدَيْهِ رَقِيبٌ عَتِيدٌ)) ‏

your sister

[Karim_Rap_4_life]

First of all thank you for calling me to correct
and post my views I'm really admired by your
request yeah whatever we are friends without
asking me I do that I just did not notice your
topic okey let's see:
remember that every member right here make a lot of
mistakes so don't be upset for this long list but
I guarantee you will learn so much from them
Mistakes:
walk___I'm Walking
I think you should say I'm walking why? because
it is your life so:
your life is just like in here
سلم زمني
A___________B___________C
A is the past
B is the present
C is the future
you're walking in a narrow path:
When you start walking? of course before "b"
when will you stop? ofcourse "c"
when you do something but you still don't finish it
you should use ("to be" in present+Verb+ing)
it is called the present Continious In french
"le present Progressive".
It will be better if you say
"I'm walking through a narrow path"
treat____Treats
you are talking about the way you live so you need
to use the present tense because you are describing
a present situation....If so the (Fate is a single )
always add "s" to the verbe in case of (she, he, It)
enjailed__Jailed_Imprisoned
Darkness of the world____Darkness world
loud____aloud_loudly_so loud
Adverbe comes after verb why "because it describe
the way the doer does and action"
Adjective come after Nouns
my eyes wipe blood___shed tears of bloods
Over the game___make the game Over
but I know you need to put "game" in the
end because of the rhymes so you can just say
"I'm waiting just To finish the Game"
.....how I am______Who am I?
Your poem:
The ideas of the poem are a words of a strong Girl
"I walk alone in a narrow path"
"totally lonely oh it's too hard"
you are sinking in loneliness you mentioned the
word lonely and alone they are serving the same
meaning I guess you're lonely for real the narrow path
it is just like you have no other way to achieve your
goals.
"the fate treat me so bad"__Yeah that's of bad
situation but you know what fate is the choise of
our GOD and we obey God's willing just be patient
God choose for as things to happen whatever they are
good or bad even if they are worse there is a wisedom
in them just because of God is examining us if we
are a real belivers so just hold on
my own opinion but don't take it seriously I think
you should not say "fate treat me so bad" I don't know
If I was you I wouldn't write it ...never be disapointed
we all make mistakes remember that.
- your soul is jailed by the darkness It is really
well chosen words I like it so much
-"There is no different if you go or stay"..no one will
miss you and care for you if you Go or stay???
I think you mean that don't you??
"Bad Girl" the name that you mention
and the way you called that handsome it just like
hey you know what "I'm really who I am" you said
it in a way of self confident and that's the bad girls do
there is to things of expressions...But I think "bad Girl is not appropreatefull
I think you are cute Girl..."

-self expression______You know how to express your feeling very well
-Ideas expression____You know how to write them down ...Gramatical
structure and rhymes and vocabulary and so on
In poetry I think you should know firstly "Self expression" secondly "ideas expressions"
why?
If you know how to apply rhymes and grammar and all things but have nothing to say about your self that's terrible and you can do nothing becasue self comprehension is something obligatory
about a the gramar and mistakes it's simple and you can just learn more and more progressively
by the time but with so works and exercises...
I think you know how to express your self but there is just a little problem with Grammar but not a big deal believe me just continue and you need to follow other members writing and especially when someones correct their mistakes you will learn so much.
My last words right here just write and "shin shyn" and me are the ones who are supposed to encourage you and guide you why no you are an "algerian Light" don't you?

[برعم امل]

can i ask you ?? why you said*there is no différent
to live or to die** you must live and like your life and your gad if you really want reach to your aim
really i think you feel by sad and niss ????????????? i think

[Algerian's light]

Wow

*
*
Nice writing Girl i Love it so much
really there are some mistakes like u said

and u wish if Karim Correct it
hhhhh

Ok
i'll let him do
C'mmon Karim Correct them


By the way plz can u tell me what u mean By
enjailed

you have a good pen i wish u Good Luck

Carry On


^.^

Peace
]
thaaaanks a looooooooot sister..:).
*enjailed mean مسجون in arabic. I don't know if it is true

[Algerian's light]

First of all thank you for calling me to correct
and post my views I'm really admired by your
request yeah whatever we are friends without
asking me I do that I just did not notice your
topic okey let's see:
remember that every member right here make a lot of
mistakes so don't be upset for this long list but
I guarantee you will learn so much from them
Mistakes:
walk___I'm Walking
I think you should say I'm walking why? because
it is your life so:
your life is just like in here
سلم زمني
A___________B___________C
A is the past
B is the present
C is the future
you're walking in a narrow path:
When you start walking? of course before "b"
when will you stop? ofcourse "c"
when you do something but you still don't finish it
you should use ("to be" in present+Verb+ing)
it is called the present Continious In french
"le present Progressive".
It will be better if you say
"I'm walking through a narrow path"
treat____Treats
you are talking about the way you live so you need
to use the present tense because you are describing
a present situation....If so the (Fate is a single )
always add "s" to the verbe in case of (she, he, It)
enjailed__Jailed_Imprisoned
Darkness of the world____Darkness world
loud____aloud_loudly_so loud
Adverbe comes after verb why "because it describe
the way the doer does and action"
Adjective come after Nouns
my eyes wipe blood___shed tears of bloods
Over the game___make the game Over
but I know you need to put "game" in the
end because of the rhymes so you can just say
"I'm waiting just To finish the Game"
.....how I am______Who am I?
Your poem:
The ideas of the poem are a words of a strong Girl
"I walk alone in a narrow path"
"totally lonely oh it's too hard"
you are sinking in loneliness you mentioned the
word lonely and alone they are serving the same
meaning I guess you're lonely for real the narrow path
it is just like you have no other way to achieve your
goals.
"the fate treat me so bad"__Yeah that's of bad
situation but you know what fate is the choise of
our GOD and we obey God's willing just be patient
God choose for as things to happen whatever they are
good or bad even if they are worse there is a wisedom
in them just because of God is examining us if we
are a real belivers so just hold on
my own opinion but don't take it seriously I think
you should not say "fate treat me so bad" I don't know
If I was you I wouldn't write it ...never be disapointed
we all make mistakes remember that.
- your soul is jailed by the darkness It is really
well chosen words I like it so much
-"There is no different if you go or stay"..no one will
miss you and care for you if you Go or stay???
I think you mean that don't you??
"Bad Girl" the name that you mention
and the way you called that handsome it just like
hey you know what "I'm really who I am" you said
it in a way of self confident and that's the bad girls do
there is to things of expressions...But I think "bad Girl is not appropreatefull
I think you are cute Girl..."

-self expression______You know how to express your feeling very well
-Ideas expression____You know how to write them down ...Gramatical
structure and rhymes and vocabulary and so on
In poetry I think you should know firstly "Self expression" secondly "ideas expressions"
why?
If you know how to apply rhymes and grammar and all things but have nothing to say about your self that's terrible and you can do nothing becasue self comprehension is something obligatory
about a the gramar and mistakes it's simple and you can just learn more and more progressively
by the time but with so works and exercises...
I think you know how to express your self but there is just a little problem with Grammar but not a big deal believe me just continue and you need to follow other members writing and especially when someones correct their mistakes you will learn so much.
My last words right here just write and "shin shyn" and me are the ones who are supposed to encourage you and guide you why no you are an "algerian Light" don't you?

a really thanks bro...woow woow..
I do a "Massacr" in english..But I'm so happy because I laern a lot of things so thaaaaaaaaaank youu teacher:19:

[Karim_Rap_4_life]

hey you did nothing very bad no it is just a few mistakes so I did correct them ....I'm not a teacher i'm just like you and others hh

[حكاية قلب]

thaaaanks a looooooooot sister..:).
*enjailed mean مسجون in arabic. I don't know if it is true



ahhhhhh u mean 'jailed' cause ther's no word like u said
i mean enjailed

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§


Karim

hey you did nothing very bad no it is just a few mistakes so I did correct them ....I'm not a teacher i'm just like you and others hh

Comm'Onnnnn Dnt be Shy....hhhh
Ur a Good teacher and u know it
p:
;)

[برعم امل]

Can you be friends to me ?? really i want that......so

[Algerian's light]

can i ask you ?? why you said*there is no différent
to live or to die** you must live and like your life and your gad if you really want reach to your aim
really i think you feel by sad and niss ????????????? i think


yeah..you're right..I must forget the and prepare for the next....thank u sis

[Algerian's light]

Can you be friends to me ?? really i want that......so

wow that's an honor for me.look this my name in f.a.c.e.b.o.o.k. NoUr El Imane.

[برعم امل]

thank you ...............nice to meet you .................me too my name is
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