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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : A Kannibal Girl


Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-10-31, 10:50
Hello every body every one in here i wish you're doing good
this is my favorite poem that I wrote, the fact that is the truth nothing Imaginary it is a real story so I'm looking for your reviews___Critics too if you feel something bad for the *******s or the way i wrote it the way I put the rhymes, Coherent any thing that seems too bad or unappropreate, just type it you're welcome, I'm looking for hard critics you're welcome every body, but don't forget your justification those who want to criticise need the proof_ whatever I wish you like it is from a heart no more lies.

"To the Cannibal Girl who bit my heart"

Hey common what's up You know I can't give up
Even if I got stroke up I was not born to flop
Call it what you think it is, for me love is a disease
I was serious so nothing made the pain to appease
I got affections like a mob on the door
I was Number one on the love floor
I used to be on the top of the score
Love what's love get away you poor
You have any idea you don't know what it does mean?
What? I can't understand what are you saying Karim?
Of course it is your response
It is like a charge of offense
Follow me I will show and you will decide
That's real I have nothing to hide
That's my experience may be will stick for many years
It was clear that the Truth were my Wears
I was afraid to be back to what I had
I lost my lonliness it was my best friend
Acting like a soldier did not want to retreat
The love enemy could lead me to the defeat
I gave you what you need but you did cheat
What you did is loyalty you exhibited
But that thing you meant never existed
You knew that to you I was addicted
You guessed I wouldn't from you i got played
But now my love to you is out of use, it's expired
My heart was lost but by my mind got inspired
I don't want to negociate now you're who I really hate
Just go look for another mate don't hesitate
I've no sentiments, I've nothing more for you
The world is full of liars similars to you
You are looking for an interview
Self esteem you have is so few
I guarantee that you're not my cup of tea
If i continued I would be supposed that I exaggerated
Simply I want to say that my love to you, was evaporated
you can consider that to me you never existed
The memories we lived, from my brain are deleted
What I'm expecting is your distiny full of suffering
You were the point of my devastating
You are going to travel through the corruption
So I give you the ticket as a reaction
I wish the bad for you Lady, Attention!
I just want to say Congratulation
That's the final words of my conclusion
you're number one pretender of delusion
yeah Cannibal girl, Animal feel better than you
Yeah Cannibal Girl a lot of them there is a lot
Too much bad too much harmful yeah solitude is good

expect the deep poems of mine wait for them words like weapon phrases like chemical bombs .
:mh92:

ilina 07
2011-10-31, 21:22
waw this poem is so agressif full of anger and hate ..for now this is really your best ..i especially like this part
Simply I want to say that my love to you, was evaporated
you can consider that to me you never existed
The memories we lived, from my brain are deleted
What I'm expecting is your distiny full of suffering
You were the point of my devastating
You are going to travel through the corruption
So I give you the ticket as a reaction

Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-11-01, 13:19
yeah i'm personally like the part you like so i'm happy to tell you thank you friend you're welcome wait for my next poem for one day i wish you will like it or day it's title "Soldier a son of the people"

ilina 07
2011-11-01, 15:55
i'm sur that i'll like it ..thank you for your amazing work

Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-11-02, 13:56
I'm sure that you will say sure when I publish it Thank you "Helena"

Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-11-02, 17:17
Every body in here no comments no critics where are you common please I need your comments what'up

sourire hili
2011-11-10, 17:08
I love it thax brother and the part that I love is

Simply I want to say that my love to you, was evaporated
you can consider that to me you never existed
The memories we lived, from my brain are deleted
What I'm expecting is your distiny full of suffering
You were the point of my devastating
You are going to travel through the corruption
So I give you the ticket as a reaction

Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-11-10, 18:54
I love it thax brother and the part that I love is

Simply I want to say that my love to you, was evaporated
you can consider that to me you never existed
The memories we lived, from my brain are deleted
What I'm expecting is your distiny full of suffering
You were the point of my devastating
You are going to travel through the corruption
So I give you the ticket as a reaction
Thqnk you sis for pqssing

حكاية قلب
2011-11-28, 13:45
it's so beautiful words full of sentiments..
i like it and i like the final part of it

i felt the words are so special
and causes to a painful story you lived

keep writing your feelings
you have the right way to do that

^.^

Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-12-03, 17:40
it's so beautiful words full of sentiments..
i like it and i like the final part of it

i felt the words are so special
and causes to a painful story you lived

keep writing your feelings
you have the right way to do that

^.^

Thank you a lot fopr your passing and encouraging me the fact that i'm her to hear or see yor comments wherever they are good or worse or i don't ow I see them the fact that when some one comment on my writtings it just enjoy me and make me feel that there are still too many peoples who really care for te others matters so thank you gin for you words and i'm here to show you my writing exspect another sentimentals works of mine okey it just will happen hahahahaah

حكاية قلب
2011-12-03, 19:34
Thank you a lot fopr your passing and encouraging me the fact that i'm her to hear or see yor comments wherever they are good or worse or i don't ow I see them the fact that when some one comment on my writtings it just enjoy me and make me feel that there are still too many peoples who really care for te others matters so thank you gin for you words and i'm here to show you my writing exspect another sentimentals works of mine okey it just will happen hahahahaah
Never Mind
i know how to feel when sombody intrest bout
what ur doing
^^
i'm Glad to to hear that
and it's Nice to read
newest of ur great writes too

i'll be waitinG
cause honestly i learn
so much when i read it

^.^

Ps :
and keep that
laugh like.....Oo
" hahahahaa "
cause i like it
hhhhh

^.^'

rock-girl46
2011-12-17, 18:25
wow this is amazing and it seems that u r hurting and feeling hurted well beleive me nothing deserve this
carry on

Karim_Rap_4_life
2011-12-18, 13:06
wow this is amazing and it seems that u r hurting and feeling hurted well beleive me nothing deserve this
carry on

hhhhhhhh yeah Girl Thank you nothing deserve my tears they are so precious but I don't feel no pain right because I feel nothing for Her......She is a toy of Life I don't maind if she come back or she die hhhhh