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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : Time to leave


no way end of time
2010-12-11, 15:56
The better days
can't returne
no one can share
with you sadness breakness
we tray to go away
...to forget
to begin a new life
... but we can't
something in ourside call us
...to satay
...to remember
our blessed days
our sad days
our hardest days
...our friends
this is time to leave
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yalova
2010-12-12, 15:22
رائــــــــــــــــعة لكن من الأفضل اغناؤها ببعض الأعكار الأخرى
صح لياسنك أوا قلمك
والله ما عمبالي
بــــــــــــــــاي

Fairy_Rina
2010-12-12, 17:11
the main idea is so nice it's good but the way to express it is somehow not clear
so u have to keep ur idea nd to work on it , but generaly it's a good poem
keep going , wish u luck

rachaa
2011-09-01, 12:15
then it's time to leave very well then it seems like u already made a desicion lol. i liked ur words there r preatty obvious emotions right there. my regards