i need your opinion about this

[أميرة مملكة السعادة]

peace be upon you

today i'm gonna show u my first poem
i hope u'll like it and remember i really need your opinion about it

when i look in your eyes

i can see that you have a surprise
i don't know what is it
because i don't wanna open it
my be it's bad
than i will be so sad
i don't wanna lose you
in this world i'm living because of you
try to listen to my heart
and to know what it want
try to push the sadness aside
and plant the happiness in your mind
try to understand me
cause i need you to forgive me
just take care of me
and you will be a special for me
who says that i'll fall in love
and i'lll give all what i have
i remember when i was talking to you
i didn't know what is the mater with you
and when you talk to me
i can feel like this girl is not me

u can find my poems on my youtube channel : Chebaiki Djoumana
peace

[اعجوبة الحياة]

wawwwwwwwwww

i really loved your poeme

so good . fantastic

[أحمد بوفاريك]

Wonderful words
keep writing girl
wish you all the best

[أميرة مملكة السعادة]

wawwwwwwwwww

i really loved your poeme

so good . fantastic

thank u so much sis

[أميرة مملكة السعادة]

Wonderful words
keep writing girl
wish you all the best

thanx alot bro that's so kind of u

[دلال 30]

wonderful......

[علي لقواطي]

sorry, I'm not into poetry.

[abdallah21000]

try this :
than -then- i will be so sad

in this world i'm living because of you -for you-

greetings

[Hunter556]

Good one hence having some lil mistakes.

[القمة انفو]

i love it :p

[rain]

Wow ,it is so amazing :1:
the words are full expressions. I liked it http://emoticoner.com/files/emoticons/crazy-monkey/crazy-monkey-emoticon-003.gif?1292792378
...keep going:D

[آلغآردينيآ]

wooow
amazing

[anissa rita]

awesome and romantic.. love it

[miss_cool]

I like it
very nice

[immmene]

this is a good poeme sister

[nasiroo]

I like it ;)

[جنة الفردوسْ]

i like ur words i felt that they are from the deep of ur heart....good job

well i've some remarkes....it's better to say i look into ur eyes....we say maybe not my be.....

[smouadji18]

i just noticed a mistake i hope u will correct it :
you say : i dont know what it is , and NOT ; ...what is it
otherwise its goood continue

[أميرة مملكة السعادة]

thanx alot friends that's so kind of u i really thank u