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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : It is not a lipstick


Om Abdul Malik
2015-12-04, 13:06
salam every one I really need your oppinions and please read it !


IT IS NOT A LIPSTICK


I am going to be a beautiful bride,like a princess I will shine and I will live happily ever after.I really don't understand why couples fight these days I mean I am really confused life isn't that difficult espcially if you marry the man you love and believe me with conversation any probleme can be sovled besides my husband is a nice understanding man ,he is so gentle and he likes to make me the most happiest person on earth

.I met him at work where I was working as a resident doctor ;and he brought his mother for a regular health check.He got my attention at that moment from many sides he is a tall handsome man with shar eyes and deep voice ,but of course I pretend that everything is ok;for him I looked like he described me later a' young clever doctor ' but it seems that I wasn't that clever in fact.Well the rest is so classic we were both beaten by a squint cupid and a poisonous arrow hit my heart to fall in what is called LOVE.


..........................Looking at the mirror .
Day 20 after wedding day a little bit of blue and green upon my eyelid and bronze color on my cheek .My lips are fully red what I a beautiful bride I am!
Day 19:Preparing alot of dishes and food trays I am living alone with my husband thus I have to show him that I **** well and that his wife is a good housewife.




TO BE CONTINUED

Om Abdul Malik
2015-12-04, 17:00
24 view and no reply is it that bad????

maghi
2015-12-05, 21:43
Hello sister ..
welcome in this section if
it is your first time ..
what have you write isn't bad ..
but I think that you should reorder it
by adding ponctuation & avoide
repetitions to make it
a little bit easyer for reading ..
wish you the best..

Om Abdul Malik
2015-12-05, 22:00
Hello sister ..
welcome in this section if
it is your first time ..
what have you write isn't bad ..
but I think that you should reorder it
by adding ponctuation & avoide
repetitions to make it
a little bit easy for reading ..
wish you the best..




Thak you very much I will take that in consideration:o

.kiki
2015-12-11, 18:58
thanks for sharing that with us
um.. 1st I honestly didn't get why you named it "it's not a lipstick"?
and 2nd.. I really like the fact that conflicts between couples make you confused lol..
and 3rd.. I don't beleive "happily ever after" exists in Dunya, my friend, It only exists in Akhira.
best wishes for you and.. keep it up!

Om Abdul Malik
2015-12-12, 18:43
[QUOTE=.kiki;3994808424]thanks for sharing that with us
um.. 1st I honestly didn't get why you named it "it's not a lipstick"?
and 2nd.. I really like the fact that conflicts between couples make you confused lol..
and 3rd.. I don't beleive "happily ever after" exists in Dunya, my friend, It only exists in Akhira.
best wishes for you and.. keep it up![/QUOT
thank you very much for your opinion ,well concerning the title you will understand it after the second part will be realised here I can't wait to read your opinion again

Southpaw
2016-03-22, 14:58
Nice writing and the story seems to be more a korean love story though ^^