مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : Help me to correct these two paragraphs
Ali26000
2015-07-21, 13:52
Reducing the cost of production of potable water is one key challenge for the local decision-makers of French cities. In fact, according to the manager of potable water in Paris region (Syndicat des Eaux d’Ile-de-France) the average cost of production and transport (until arriving to the users) of potable water in 2015 is 2.50 euros per m3. It represents about 70% of the total cost of each m3 of potable water in the majority French great cities.
Furthermore, as stated by the Water Information Center (centre d’information sur l’eau) the average domestic water consumption in France is 137 litres per day and per inhabitant, with 9.50 litres (7%) devoted for alimentary consumption (drink and food preparation). Only, therefore, this quantity requires really the potable quality, while the rest can be satisfied by a less quality than potable one, specially: the outside consumption (watering, car cleaning), house cleaning (watching machine, dish machine) and toilets fleshing that represent 74 litres (54%).
kameljijeli
2015-07-21, 15:00
Reducing the cost of production of potable water is one key challenge for the local decision-makers of French cities. In fact, according to the manager of potable water in Paris region (Syndicat des Eaux d’Ile-de-France) the average cost of production and transport (until arriving to the users) of potable water in 2015 is 2.50 euros per m3. It represents about 70% of the total cost of each m3 of potable water in the majority French great cities.
Furthermore, as stated by the Water Information Center (centre d’information sur l’eau) the average domestic water consumption in France is 137 litres (liters) per day and per inhabitant, with 9.50 litres (liters) (7%) devoted for alimentary consumption (drink and food preparation). Only, therefore, this quantity requires really the potable (water good )quality, while the rest can be satisfied by a less quality water than potable water , esspecially: the water consumption for other purposes (garden watering, car cleaning), in house uses (watching (washing )machine, dish machine) and toilets fleshing ( flushing) that represents 74 litres (liters) (54%).
1- cost of production : production cost
2- the manager of potable water in Paris region : it is not correct. you should write : the manager of the company which is in charge of potable water management
3- 137 litres per day : 137 liters per day ()
hope it helped you. you can review it again and again to detect more mistakes..
good luck . KAMEL
Ali26000
2015-07-21, 15:04
1- cost of production : production cost
2- the manager of potable water in Paris region : it is not correct. you should write : the manager of the company which is in charge of potable water management
3- 137 litres per day : 137 liters per day ()
hope it helped you. you can review it again and again to detect more mistakes..
good luck . KAMEL
Thank you very much (بارك الله فيك
I just highlighted other words/expression that need correction:
Reducing the cost of production of potable water is one key challenge for the local decision-makers of French cities. In fact, according to the manager of potable water in Paris region (Syndicat des Eaux d’Ile-de-France) the average cost of production and transport (until arriving to the users) of potable water in 2015 is 2.50 euros per m3. It represents about 70% of the total cost of each m3 of potable water in the majority French great cities.
Furthermore, as stated by the Water Information Center (centre d’information sur l’eau) the average domestic water consumption in France is 137 litres per day and per inhabitant, with 9.50 litres (7%) devoted for alimentary consumption (drink and food preparation). Only, therefore, this quantity requires really the potable quality, while the rest can be satisfied by a less quality than potable one, specially: the outside consumption (watering, car cleaning), house cleaning (watching machine, dish machine) and toilets fleshing that represent 74 litres (54%)
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