this is my paragraph in english

[طالبة العلم نور]

hi . how are you
our teacher give us a home work about avantages and disavantages and this is mine
pleaaaaaaaade read it and give me your opinion about it
well we bigin


the internet is a nice invention and it is tooooo important in our dailies , and like any thing in the domain of communucation , it has avantages and disavantages.


we think that the internet is very useful invention. first , it helps us to search for information , to contact and correspond with another peoples from different countries , to listen to music and playing games.in tyhis kind of using internet is so, so, so useful.

in the contrary , internet can be dangerous when weuse it in a bad way like; speading roomers , lying and giving wrong informations sometimes .some people addict to the internet which cause for them problems with their freinds and loved one. also there are somepronographic sites that is can be in the hands of children to easely, and the ost iportant thing which caused by the internet is * loosing time*
finally , i send a letter to all internet users :


*don't addict on the internet and use it to rich yiour culture.



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[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

Hello knowledge seaker I wish you're doing good emm I read your paeragraph it was good and acceptable depending on your level medium school you have only some problems in Grammar and orthographe and this will be improved step by step Reading and paying attention to what you learn through English classes.
Words in red color are wrong and words in green color are true
good luck


our teacher give (Gave) us a home work about avantages (Advantages) and disavantages (Disadvantages) and this is mine
pleaaaaaaaase read it and give (Tell me what do you think about it?)/(Tell me your opinion about it) me your opinion about it
well we bigin (Let's begin/start)


the internet is a nice invention and it is tooooo important in our dailies , and like any thing in the domain of communucation , it has avantages (Advantages) and disavantages (Disadvantages)


we think that the internet is very useful invention. first , it helps us to search for information , to contact and correspond with another peoples (People) from different countries , to listen to music and playing games. in this kind of using internet is so useful. (Like this using the internet is positive)

in the contrary , internet can be dangerous when we use it in a bad way like; speading roomers (Spreading Rumors) , lying and giving wrong informations (some nouns stay the same in the plural form we don't add s to them) sometimes some people addict (get addicted) to the internet which cause for them problems with their freinds ( causes/ creates problems between them and their friends) and loved one. also there are some pronographic sites that is can be in the hands of children (easy for our children to see/watch) to easely, and the most important thing which caused by the internet is loosing (Wasting) time.
finally , i send a letter to all internet users :


don't addict (get addicted to) the internet and use it to rich (enrich/ develop) your culture.

[طالبة العلم نور]

thank you for your notes and remarks
just i want to tell you
i am in the secondary scool 1 year

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

okay Sister good luck and don't hesitate to ask for an advice or an explanation about anything thanks

[طالبة العلم نور]

thank you so much
i am so happy to ask an advice from you

i love English too much
i love speaking by this ********for all that is not my Stream

but if ineed some thing i will ask you absoloutly

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

No Problem sister no problem and Lang-uage is a must I advice wether you are studying a scientific stream or literary when you get your Bac inshallah you will study some subjects in French and you need English terms too so develope your lang-uage...good luck

[طالبة العلم نور]

i study scientific Stream
but i love English and i speak it with my frinds ; my teachers and even my father

my dream is studying in oxford or cambrege univ
that is why i should devlopp my ********
thanks sir

[طالبة العلم نور]

are you an English teacher!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

i study scientific Stream
but i love English and i speak it with my frinds ; my teachers and even my father

my dream is studying in oxford or cambrege univ
that is why i should devlopp my ********
thanks sir



that's the typical learner of a foreign lang-uage
Cambridge wooow
you're so ambitious emmm you have to work hard then
Reading is a must ok
learning Grammar
Speaking speaking speaking with anyone who can speak English
and never be shy be confident of your capabilities

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

are you an English teacher!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!



emmm something like that I don't know hhhh
I don't wear a penafor and I don't have a class
and I hold no school bag :p
I'm jobless Teacher

[bens]

i fond it good keep in this way if you love english and to rich your vocabulary it's too important to train yourself write paragraphes

[طالبة العلم نور]

thank u mister karim
for you dicutation
i have never speak like this

thank u for ur advises

thank u mister bens for your review

[نَازِكْ]

work hard girl n write by your feelings , keep it up n keep learning to reach your dreams
n listen to brother Karim he is pretty amazing teacher ;trust me ^^

[" أبو عبود"]

a jobless teacher, how?

[طالبة العلم نور]

a teacher for البطالة
بالعربية استاذ البطالة

[fille algerie]

Peace be upon u brother ..I congratulate u ... ur English is very very good ..
n I hope your dream come true ..
My best regards .

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

work hard girl n write by your feelings , keep it up n keep learning to reach your dreams
n listen to brother Karim he is pretty amazing teacher ;trust me ^^


Thanks Intisar that's nice from you

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

thank u mister karim
for you dicutation
i have never speak like this

thank u for ur advises





Okaay thank u Sister

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

a jobless teacher, how?




Corruption and Feminine worshipers
I mean the responsibles
Ministers
The president
pffff

[طالبة العلم نور]

mister karim
why doon"t you go to work in a private school
it"s very intersting job

[طالبة العلم نور]

i know a teacher of English Took Dblomha the 7 years ago and did not find work
And now and Thank God I found work and is now plotter
Never give up

[university4english]

thank u for trying to write in english ,step by step you will become better and better

[Girl ALG]

hiii
there are some mistake but it is good
i'll write my paragraph later in my topic

[خالد دردور]

3/10 this is my mark for your paragraph
you should iumprove you writting skills
just kidding with you
good luck in your study
your brother