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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : wake up call.


Katy Pretty girl
2013-07-20, 23:04
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نَازِكْ
2013-07-21, 13:21
i'm goona read it carefuly

Katy Pretty girl
2013-07-21, 16:20
ok
i'll be waiting for u'r comments

نَازِكْ
2013-07-21, 16:40
it's amazing katy
i wish i cold write about alot of things not only my self
so iappreciate it
i hope that ur poem will wake us up
cus mankind is always late in realizing such stuffs
thanks sweetie for sharing
keep it up ur a talented girl

Katy Pretty girl
2013-07-21, 16:52
thanks for u'r complements
well i was watching the arivals on youtube
and i felt so stupid
so i found a paper & pen near me
and i started to write
we realy need to wake up
thanks for passing by ^_^

نغمة الفرح
2013-07-21, 18:02
waaaaw
that's realy Good i like it
Unfortunately, this is our reality
i wanna to see the Change
&
i waiting your news poem
take care of your selves
&
saha ftourkoum

:D

Karim-Rap-4-Life
2013-07-21, 19:41
Hello saha ramdankom Saha ramdanak Katy this is the best piece you have written it’s so much clear and developed than the previous once rhymes are perfect majority of lines too but some others need to be fixed whatever I like it coz it’s a clear message and positive thinking to be unified for one reason of love and brotherhood during reading it I tried to help you fix something read it again and see the difference and you’re free of course it’s your writing and you’re the responsible



Can you stop the hate, can you walk straight
There's no time to wait, before it will be late


i want to change the world can you help me please
let’s give it a try it's not that hard to be released
The good person inside you about to decrease
The hate, the anger, we want to live in peace
Stop doing bad things, stop saying lies
Recognize that you supposed to be wise


Darkness is harsh should never rise
we can see the light in the child's eyes

Learn how to work together and try to hold
Each other's hands, that gives us a hope

Peaceful hearts that shines like a shiny gold

I’ve been told "Being together is being strong"



forget the bad times, the dark past, find something new
It doesn't matter if we're many or few
with your help I can do it, you knew
That we should get rid of lies and keep everything true
Being a strong, smart, brave, that’s the case’s clue
it's easy as counting from one to two
Read my poem and tell If you agree with me too
we can start from now, it's all up to you
It’s not about killing, scaring then saying sorry
you and I want to write our own story
we all want need to make our own glory
you already know what you have to do so don't worry
you have to be strong so as to build your wall
stop being stupid, this is a wake-up call!!

Keep it up I’m waiting to read your next

Karim-Rap-4-Life
2013-07-21, 19:45
Yow I watched them all I mean the Arrivals and three other series I got too many info from it

زهرة الربيع
2013-07-21, 22:59
wowwwwwww

that's really great thank you sister
it's very sad to say that but it's our reality and we are the ones who have to change it into a good one

thanks again for your wake up call

saha ftourkoum/shourkoum

peace

Katy Pretty girl
2013-07-22, 16:03
waaaaw
that's realy Good i like it
Unfortunately, this is our reality
i wanna to see the Change
&
i waiting your news poem
take care of your selves
&
saha ftourkoum

:D
thanks
i'm glad that u like it
good to see u here
sa7a ramdanek sis

Katy Pretty girl
2013-07-22, 16:05
Hello saha ramdankom Saha ramdanak Katy this is the best piece you have written it’s so much clear and developed than the previous once rhymes are perfect majority of lines too but some others need to be fixed whatever I like it coz it’s a clear message and positive thinking to be unified for one reason of love and brotherhood during reading it I tried to help you fix something read it again and see the difference and you’re free of course it’s your writing and you’re the responsible



Can you stop the hate, can you walk straight
There's no time to wait, before it will be late


i want to change the world can you help me please
let’s give it a try it's not that hard to be released
The good person inside you about to decrease
The hate, the anger, we want to live in peace
Stop doing bad things, stop saying lies
Recognize that you supposed to be wise


Darkness is harsh should never rise
we can see the light in the child's eyes

Learn how to work together and try to hold
Each other's hands, that gives us a hope

Peaceful hearts that shines like a shiny gold

I’ve been told "Being together is being strong"



forget the bad times, the dark past, find something new
It doesn't matter if we're many or few
with your help I can do it, you knew
That we should get rid of lies and keep everything true
Being a strong, smart, brave, that’s the case’s clue
it's easy as counting from one to two
Read my poem and tell If you agree with me too
we can start from now, it's all up to you
It’s not about killing, scaring then saying sorry
you and I want to write our own story
we all want need to make our own glory
you already know what you have to do so don't worry
you have to be strong so as to build your wall
stop being stupid, this is a wake-up call!!

Keep it up I’m waiting to read your next

wonderful i like it
it's so great
u can put some music in it and make it a song
i realy like it
thanks

Katy Pretty girl
2013-07-22, 16:06
wowwwwwww

that's really great thank you sister
it's very sad to say that but it's our reality and we are the ones who have to change it into a good one

thanks again for your wake up call

saha ftourkoum/shourkoum

peace
thanks sis for u'r comments
and for passing by
sa7a ftorek