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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : on board of the dreams' ship


Asolvip
2013-06-21, 20:08
on board of the dreams' ship
One day I *had dream
It was about to come alive
But it has stopped when *I heard that scream
Hurry up! Get in the ship ...*
Where is my friends , where is my family?! They're gone
I think their time is done !
I wanted to have the best friendship
And also I wanted to have a scholarship
I can't leave this place
*this is where I grew up with my brothers face to face
Get in the ship ... It's war !
No, I said ... I want from this life more
I wanted to build a castle with a huge door
And the silver covers all the floor
I wanted to have a wife and three boys and a girl is four
It's war ... Get in the ship if u want to stay alive!
What do I want from life?
I'm an old man .. With wrinkled skin
I did a *mistake in my life and I want to get healed of my sin
I had a bad life , but a beautiful wife
I had six children not five
I was evil and one day I dug her with a knife*
Because she told me we don't deserve this miserable life
So why should I get in the ship ? Come pretty lady ...Skip!
Thank you my father*
You did a gentle thing , better than my brother
He tried to kill me when we lost our mother
But I ran away looking for her from one place to another
I wish we could find each other
But she went to an empty earth
Where the first time she was given birth
I said : get in the ship ... Your last chance !
Momy! Where is she? I can't find her*
She asked me to wait , she will bring my sister with her
No, I can't lose my mom , I'll live with her
My last breath will be next to her... I promised *her
Shut up! Young lady ... You should get in calm or die like a dog next to your mom*
I was looking ,crying on my broken wings*
I forgot all about the diamonds and rings
All my dreams fled away
While I was staring at my dreams' ship moving away
I wanted to go but in moments I decided to stay
I can't leave my country suffer this way
Goodbye ... I'll meet you one day*

So its a bit complicated ..it's a kind of a melodrama (melody +drama) it will be represented on a stage and sung by actors ... I imagined this story when people lived the world wars .
So,
The first person who starts is the writer himself and he also ends the piece
The second person is a boy
3rd is a man*
Then 4th is an old man
5th is a lady
6th is a little girl
And the captain who says : get in the ship ( he don't sing)

Asolvip
2013-06-21, 21:29
Guys... I need your opinion :(

Maria Rap 4 Ever
2013-06-22, 00:13
woow
good job it was really nice

Asolvip
2013-06-22, 11:43
Thank you(^_^)☆

Katy Pretty girl
2013-06-22, 16:47
u don't need our opinions
girl u'r PRO
abir u'r one of u'r kind
his is the best of u'r works
i will vote for you
i promise u
cuz u deserve that
u'r the best

Asolvip
2013-06-22, 16:57
Thank you so so much