heart breaker!!!

[Katy Pretty girl]

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[Katy Pretty girl]

what do u think

[Asolvip]

Nice ... Heart breaker .. Good job .. Just as I told u pay attention to the mistakes .. And try to write using dictionaries ..
Well I'll give you a small replay to your song
I always knew that you are a heart breaker
But instead I'm always a love maker
You are trying to break me down
I'll fall but not to the ground
I'll stand again and be your man
Just count from one to ten
Close your eyes then
Youll find me behind you
Smiling for you
Asking you to never be my heart breaker
Because you are my paste and I Know Im a Good Baker !!

[Katy Pretty girl]

hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
good job
wel when i'll break some hearts i'll send it to u so as u can fix it

[Asolvip]

Alright ! I'm waiting for those hearts but I'm sure that you are a good girl .. U just say you want to break heart but I'm afraid they break yours .. Hhhh I'm here to support you ^^

[Katy Pretty girl]

i won't let them
and you'll see

[Asolvip]

Nchallah always be strong ヾ(＠⌒ー⌒＠)ノ

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

This is so strong Girl enough to break and kick keep it up I like it so much but Look be careful to the rhymes they should be like 2 4 6 8 like that okay coz when the reader find line 1 and 2 rhymes the same it will create a kinda tone but what if there was a third line that rhyme with the 1 & 2 but there is no 4 so the there will be a kinda bel3arbiya ki (doudane) hhhhh -----^------ ooow damn hahahahah hey just try to develop it a good job ya yaaaaaaaay

[Black_Poison]

Sometimes it just has to be
^_^
Strong words...enough to break and kick ....like somebody said
Just as strong as your spirit
keep it up darling

[Karim-Rap-4-Life]

Ow really I did not know that about country style so u do great then ^^

[Asolvip]

Me too ... Well keep it up ... I got new poems I hope you could check them.

[Katy Pretty girl]

i think u'r gonna be the winner
cuz u'r so active
i realy hope u win
i think i'm not going to participate

[Asolvip]

And here we are learners , so we all make mistakes but each one of us has his own ideas so u can surprise us with an awesome topic .. Who knows?

[attasoft]

Very Nice One Heart Breaker Or a Heart Beater Or Heart Crusher

[attasoft]

Really its a very very good poem thank you

[Katy Pretty girl]

thanks
for your reply

[wiwii_rock]

hey there , how are u ??? can i use it for a song :D