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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : my first poem


maroua16.58
2013-05-06, 18:57
this life is like water
it is so easy like melt of butter
it's so beautiful like cuddle of your father
it's so ,shy like hand of your mather
if you live it with hope you feel like that you shine
you feel like a king and you have a crown
sometimes you sad and sometimes you fun
sometimes you feel better and sometimes you run
but this is the life let's live it with smie like line of the sun

No Love
2013-05-07, 00:18
Enjoy today while you can .... Because tomorrow is a shotgun

anyway i found it so cute

maroua16.58
2013-05-07, 08:58
...........................thank's................ ..................

saim_n
2013-05-09, 23:44
thanks u

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saber noui
2013-05-10, 09:30
nice words

karoum 65
2013-05-15, 11:08
thank you very much

achraf kabouche
2013-05-26, 13:59
that's sooo gooood :)

THE HD22
2013-05-26, 14:02
good job, very nice poem

david 12
2013-05-27, 00:04
i admire it lot :)

asmaja
2013-05-27, 10:59
very nice poam with a good subject keep on

رحيق العفة
2013-05-27, 13:25
that'ss perfeeeeccccccccttttttt honeyy

Houda 92
2013-05-27, 18:20
,hello

there is some mistakes in grammar, but as a beginner it's awesome

I love it

...keep going

redouan20102
2013-05-28, 07:36
ur poem is so sweet but i'de like to correct those mistakes :
sometimes you sad and sometimes you fun
it should be :
sometimes you are sad and sometimes you are fun
thank you anyway

ابتسام مراكشي
2013-05-28, 11:05
it's nice thank you

fifi tery
2013-06-06, 19:20
gooooooooooooooooooooooooood....

toulay
2013-06-07, 00:10
nice
thank you