Past

[Hind_dz]

!Hey u guys

.. So recently I started writing poems n i hope 2 get some honest opinions about my writing

.. i'm only a beginner n i'm trying 2 learn writing better

.. so here's a poem of mine .. i hope u like it

it's short so that u won't get tired of reading

:D

I try, try and try to forget

But all I feel is pain and regret

I try to let go all that is gone

All the trouble where things went wrong

But the past seems to be following me

Haunting me and holding me

From living like human beings

From being happy, pursuing dreams

So, I wish for someone by my side

To understand me, read my mind

But then I look around and see

That no one really cares for me

No love, no friends, no family

Nothing in this world worked out for me

[amel nina]

I'm happy to be the first one to comment in this topic

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what a wonderful poem



it has such a deep meaning

I liked it a lot


keep it up girl

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waiting 4 the next ones

[Hind_dz]

thnx a lot dear

.. it really feels good 2 finally see an opinion about a poem of mine cuz i usually write but i never post

:)

[Floona]

Hi, nice poem and nice topic

you write very gooooooood

[Hillin]

Wow Darling
you seems disaponted
here WE are
wer're by ur side
encourage u to carry on
and wishing you all the best
Thank you dear for sharing us such pretty expressive poem
By the way,I wanna just draw your attention to "little grammatical & orthograph mistakes"l
such as after "to"generally supposed to be"infinitive
nd just try to avoid writing( 'and') many times iwithin one sentence coz in such way it's similar to arabic structure
و,,,,,,,,و,,,,,,,,,,,و
in english we say
I liked,played,and enjoyed it
well,Hope to avoid them for next poems
so Best of Wishes
http://www.coolfreeimages.net/images/thankyou/thank_you_11.gif

[Hind_dz]

Hi, nice poem and nice topic

you write very gooooooood
thnx.. glad u like it

:)
Wow Darling
you seems disaponted
here WE are
wer're by ur side
encourage u to carry on
and wishing you all the best
Thank you dear for sharing us such pretty expressive poem
By the way,I wanna just draw your attention to "little grammatical & orthograph mistakes"l
such as after "to"generally supposed to be"infinitive
nd just try to avoid writing( 'and') many times iwithin one sentence coz in such way it's similar to arabic structure
و,,,,,,,,و,,,,,,,,,,,و
in english we say
I liked,played,and enjoyed it
well,Hope to avoid them for next poems
so Best of Wishes
http://www.coolfreeimages.net/images/thankyou/thank_you_11.gif

Hey Hillin .. thnx 4 the reply n the constructive criticism cuz that's what i'm looking 4 cuz i really want 2 improve my writing

And i'm not disappointed now.. i wrote this months ago when i was a bit down cuz i like writing 2 express my feelings but i'm okay now hmd

thnx again dear

My Regards

[Hillin]

you're always welcome Dear
and thank u for understanding my intention
Glad to hear that you overcome that feelings
wish y all the best