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Black Blossom
2012-07-09, 23:49
Small scrawl after a year ov a fastin' pen
excuse me foe those mixed up sensations.. ma b
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If age measured with happiness then write on her tomb :
“ She died before she waz born”
She just lost her last hope beat
Lost her mind in the damn crowdy street
She felt numbness couldn’t even move her feet ~
Swallowin’ lonlyness pain, burned inside suspicion’s hear
Write :
She stood in the shadow of days
Standin’sideways, lookin’ to all those broken ways
Blured by poisoned haze
Lost inside n burned az a blowin’ blaze.
Write:
She felt so left apart
She thought no need for her life’s sceen part
Sounds in her mind, whirlwind in her heart
Is it the end, or just the torment’s start?
Write:
She was there waitin’ for shinin’ smile
Under those thousands of mile
Waitin’ a hand to let the pain off
For somethin’ can broke those painfull cuff
But all waz there waz a greedy world n rough
Just lookin’ down, with hight size dirty laugh
Write:
That no place left for being week and pure
No more seekin’ for mind’s cure
Its just the time to close ur eyes and see
How thin’s should go n should be
How can faces Been hold inside
What kind of this inside can people hide~
How badly you can b oppress
Drownin’ in that lake of depress
Write :
Nothin’ worth n she waz drownin’ more
Over n over in her inevitable sore
All her guilt ..tht being a dreamer in a land of broken dreams
That he thought nothin’ ain’t like what it means..what it seems
She left that Fake Rave
She ll never expect and she ll be brave
To take all those shameful dreams away with her ..to the grave
Write:
Life start with a shine n ends with a set
That’s the point everybody must Get..
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Karim_Rap_4_life
2012-07-10, 09:23
soooooooooooooooo great believe me this one is hard and complicated and full of feeling a hard tactics I found it so deep really I see you an important figure in the future as a new member here I say welcome and I want to see more Inshallah

Black Blossom
2012-07-10, 20:43
Thnk you Karim
appreciate hearin' this rele
n pleased tht u passed around
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spy4me
2012-07-10, 21:39
hi black blossom and welcome
i like the style of your poem but make sure the next time to write academicly i mean dont use the chat lang.uage please
eventhough it is gloomy but a nice one
keep writing well

Black_Poison
2012-07-11, 00:02
Hi there sister
first i'd like to say welcome to your new home between your brothers and sisters
i hope you enjoy your time here like we all do
second
for the poem
it's amazing hard and deep and gloomy
i like this kinda poem that reflects a dark side of personality
i like the style the way you but it together
it was all perfect
my best wishes for a promising poet like you
i'll be glad to hear from you soon

Black Blossom
2012-07-22, 23:22
hi black blossom and welcome
i like the style of your poem but make sure the next time to write academicly i mean dont use the chat lang.uage please
eventhough it is gloomy but a nice one
keep writing well


Thnk you
greetin'z
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Black Blossom
2012-07-22, 23:24
Hi there sister
first i'd like to say welcome to your new home between your brothers and sisters
i hope you enjoy your time here like we all do
second
for the poem
it's amazing hard and deep and gloomy
i like this kinda poem that reflects a dark side of personality
i like the style the way you put it together
it was all perfect
my best wishes for a promising poet like you
i'll be glad to hear from you soon
Thnks foe welcumin' sis
appreciate tht
greetin'z
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amel nina
2012-07-24, 17:48
what a nice poem


i like this kind of gothic feelings, where everything becomes dark and suspicious



i hope you would amaze us with other ones soon

Black Blossom
2012-08-05, 01:05
thnks Darlin
:)
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worm
2012-08-05, 02:27
there we find the best writing method
nice job,keep it up

Black Blossom
2012-08-05, 02:32
n here we find the best reader
thnks this pushz me to the best no doubt ;)


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amel nina
2012-08-05, 03:12
there u are after a long time



believe it or not, I was wondering if u ever would come back here to the forum since u showed up suddenly and then gone like a ghost hhhhhhhh, just kidding



I really really really liked ur poem, and I wanted to get to know u more , cuz i consider u as a gifted girl

Jimmy The Rap Soldie
2012-08-19, 00:27
so dark ... but beautiful