Another poem of mine

[Mohamed]

All I see is beautiful,
All I feel is agreeable.
I know it’s so incredible,
But all became so wonderful.
The world seems more joyful,
Since you appeared like a miracle.
You picked me up from the soil,
To turn me back that hopeful.
You gave your best at all,
To plant the joy in my soul.
You’ve always been so careful,
To keep my heart so healthful.
Now you became my favorite precious jewel,
And your charm is incomparable.
So I have to be thankful,
For God then you my angel.

[the_promise_2002]

it's verry nice...thanks

[ASTUCIEUX]

It's really very nice

but I have a note

if you'll use the verb grateful instead of thankful it would be better

but even that it's really great

Keep it up

God bless you

[hocine96]

......................thanks...................

[lamino]

I think if you can make by this a song
think

[Mohamed]

You're welcome my friend! Good idea, but you must find a melody

[أحلام]

I like it
very nice
thanks

[Mohamed]

Thanks Ahlem. You must do cause a part of your name is at the end

[faithful]

hello,
I am new in this site and I need to tell you that I really like all your poems. You are so tallented as a poetry teller.
keep on writing such poems.

[Mohamed]

Hello Faithful! Welcome to our lovely forum: Djelfa, and thanks a lot for your comment, I'm sure you'll find a place between us dear brother. Take care of yourself and see you in other participations

[ملكة الأحزان]

vous êtes vraiment talentueux
c'est fameux

[lalla]

Thank you always better

[المجبري]

salam alikom brother
this is a beautifull poem , u used a good words
easy and nice and also u respected the rhyme very well if im correct in the word , but u should not say :

So I have to be thankful,
For God and you my angel

because we are muslims and we must respect our beliefs , right? its better if u change the meaning into
for god then you

and good luck ,im proud that there 's between us a poet like u

[Mohamed]

Thanks for commenting my poem. I just want you to know that I wrote it three years ago, and that sometimes I don't want to modify my poems even when they contains bad or heavy expressions! Let me tell you something, when we use the conjunction "and" between two words this doesn't mean we give the same valor to them. For instance we can say life and death, hell and paradise, ect, and they are things completely deferent and even opposite. If you read The saint Koran you see that Allah often joins His name to angels. I said angel just to mean innocent, but in fact nobody can be compared to angels. Finally it's just that you understood it so but anyway I will change it just to avoid polemic. Thanks a lot